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Post by Hope on Mar 4, 2010 7:53:54 GMT -5
In my mind, this wins the title of "creepiest story" in this issue. I find that who I thought someone was...is not at all who they are. There are relevations, and plot twists, yet all the action takes place in one room. Very well done. I cannot say any more without spoilers!
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Deb
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Haven
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Post by Deb on Mar 4, 2010 11:48:06 GMT -5
I have to agree. I haven't finished all the stories but Unleashed is the one that really stands out this time. I don't know anything about the characters but they really reached and and grabbed me.
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Thom
Dragonrider
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Post by Thom on Mar 5, 2010 18:18:34 GMT -5
Wow... and I was worried that this would read like a jumbled filler story. Hope - I'm guessing that you're speaking of S, hmmm?  Deb - I've been working on my skills at making exposition less boring.  Did it work? Incidentally, the woman who appears in the one flashback (and is later referenced in the present-day scene) is available if anyone wants to take her and run with her. She was inspired, at least in part, by "YoSaffBridge" from Firefly...  |
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Post by ginnystar on Mar 5, 2010 19:09:31 GMT -5
Who would that be? And I am new at both writing and RP  |
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Deb
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Haven
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Post by Deb on Mar 5, 2010 19:25:02 GMT -5
Thom, it definitely made me want to learn more about the history of Lord Black and Company. It sure wasn't boring. |
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Post by Chantal on Mar 6, 2010 22:33:14 GMT -5
Me, I was just reading gape-mouthed, thinking, "Someone captured Lord Black? With what army?" Very good story, Thom!
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